Anitha Felton

[Anitha Felton]

FELTON, ANITHA

NAME: Anitha Jane Felton
GENDER: Femme
BIRTHDATE: March first
AGE: Seventeen
ETHNICITY: German
HOMETOWN: Berlin, Germany
FOUND IN: Downtown Berlin, Germany
NATIVE LANGUAGE: German
SPEAKS ENGLISH: Fluently

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION:
Longish, brown/red hair, clear blue eyes and pale skin. The living epitome of beauty, and she doesn't believe it. She thinks she's ugly and hated the way she looks. Stands at five foot six inches, and only ninety two pounds.

PERSONALITY:
Ani is a very stubborn girl who is proud of who she is, no matter what. She's quiet, but around people lately she just won't stop talking, she's braver and talks to people first. Though she does suffer from a fair few things like: mass hysteria, drug addiction, bolemia, anorexia, pyromania, and hallucinates when not high.

MEMORIES & POSSESSIONS:
Brealy anything. She just has a small memory of being raped by someone and her yelling "Daddy stop it!" So she figures it was her father doing that to her. She doesn't really remember anything else, though.
But she does have a lighter in which she tames her pyromania with.

CANON/ORIGINAL: Original
PLAY-BY: Becky Lou Filip
REQUESTED NUMBER: 182
SUPERSECRET PASSPHRASE: Life is but a nightmare

Hi, my name is JAMIE and I am FIFTEEN years old. My chatango name is JAMIE, and I also play --. You can reach me via PM OR EMAIL. Oh, and here is an example of what I can do:

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[/b]nitha made her way through the building, utterly bored. she brought a small black lighter out of her back jeans pocket and flicked it until the little flame appeared. she grinned, remembering how easy it was to obtain it. all she had to do was flirt with the guard at the front doors, pretend to touch his butt, and then BAM, there it was in her hands.

the little flame was enough to entertain her for a while. she had been starting to have the craving for a needle or joint for a few days. as long as she had one of her obsessions in her hand, she would be fine - until she went hysterical again. ani took her thumb off of the lighter and the fire disappeared. a frown crossed her features, making the amazed expression on her face go as quickly as the flame.

an idea popped into the girls' head, but she wasn't sure if anyone interesting would be up there. who cares, she thought, making her way towards the floor of empty rooms. anitha scratched the back of her head as she wandered through the maze of rooms, turning left, then right, then left again. trying to make herself as lost as possible. soon she was tired of all the walking around and sat in the corner of a particuarly small room. her gaze scanned the moldy walls and ugly, dusty carpet.

the girl let out a sigh and bit on her lower lip, closing her eyes and leaning the crown of her head against the wall. she parted her pink lips and started singing softly to herself. "don't trust a hoe, never trust a hoe." her high saprano voice rang through the maze of empty rooms.[/blockquote][/blockquote][/size]

[Mia]

There's a quite a few things that are bugging me about this application...

• Your personality is pretty short; we ask for at least 5 described traits, and as of right now, it's pretty short. Could you bold the five traits, and add more of a description to each of them? (Note that her afflictions don't count for a separate trait each.)

• Also, it doesn't make much sense that "she thinks she's ugly and hates the way she looks" but is still "proud of who she is, no matter what". There's not much consistency throughout this app. It just seems like some random bits of info thrown together; there's not much development.

• I know this is going to be a total pain, as I know Anitha is you druggy and such, there's almost no way she could get ahold of drugs regularly in the labs. Especially judging by the fact that there is number 182 (which would make her one of the relatively older experiments), even if she'd had a HUGE stash on her when she was picked up, and assuming they didn't take it when they went through her stuff (which they probably would), there's no way it would've lasted to the present day labs. And other than that, it would have to be handed to her by a scout or scientist (because menials wouldn't be allowed to have drugs either) so drugs are pretty much out of the question at the labs. In fact, the scouts probably wouldn't have even picked her up, knowing she was addicted.

• The lighter, too, would probably be confiscated. Especially if she were using it to fuel her pyromania. The staff is negligent, but not that negligent.

• I hate to play the evil-admin card, but your RP sample, according to my word counter, you only have 292 words. The word minimum for all posts is 400 words. If you don't think that you can make this goal on a regular basis, then I'm afraid that RR may not be right for you.

If you can edit those things up and add a bit more detail, then I will be happy to review your app again.